Reviews for Closing Hell's Gates
Ange Amour chapter 1 . 9/11/2016
I like your style. Even though I am several years older than these characters, the story was fun to read.
ElvenValar chapter 1 . 4/5/2015
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Jennifer Conrad chapter 2 . 1/15/2015
This is interesting for me so far. I actually like the changing of the point of views but I feel like there could be more distinction between the two girl's thoughts. They often seem like the same people. I don't like the present tense of the narration but that may be just a style choice. I do like the tone of the story as it's funny and quirky but I do think there needs to be more details and it needs to slow down a bit. Like when they worked a whole shift in just one sentence. It would be better to flush it out a bit and in general the whole story seems rushed so far. There is much potential here as I've still continued to read it despite my gripes. The mystery is being built well so far as well which helps make me want to continue to read.

Keep writing! :)