the first stanza after your opening line is just captivating.

Ahh... This is the sort of poetry that always draws me in.
The first stanza feels just a little tiny bit off, somehow. The flow is just a little hitched. Can't quite pinpoint it, just a minor thing.
I absolutely adore the two closing lines. They're seemless and perfectly suited. I mean, I love the whole thing. But those, especially.