I love your stories, especially this one seeing that I'm an artist so I enjoy this even more! Please keep on writing!

I'm not good at constructive criticism, but I can tell you I really liked it, it was very cute and I found myself smiling along with the two of them :) I'd definitely read more. Also for your first story, I think it's very promising. Good job!

this is really cute! you just might wanna separate the dialogue. but please write another chapter! i really like it

1 person per paragraph, it will be better for everyone involved. You're off to a good start! But you could slow their relationship down, Do you have an antagonist? Keep these in mind! And good luck!