Aww that's so sad. I can't believe she passed away. Donny shouldn't have fought with her. I'm so glad that she managed to leave with him on a good note. Not hearing I love you from her would have affected him so badly. "I just wanted to get home so badly." It's so sad how it turned out. That turned out to be an ironic and sad tale. One thing I would recommend is to check your commas and apostrophes. :) Good start! Keep on writing.

Uhm, sorry, but if it's not too much trouble, do you think you could take a look at my story, Operation GAG? Leave a constructive review? Only one chapter would be fine. :)