Reviews for Éclair and Sir Leonhardt
Lord Goodman chapter 1 . 4/7/2015
So nice start but i see a couple things that need fixing. One you cant just say hes egotistical explicitly. Youve got to let us figure tbat out on our own. Also if he's so egotistical he wouldnt ask for help so readily. He shoulnt ask for her help she should just do it because he will never ask for it even when he might die. Also i would avoid making eclair so coy. Shes the brains here. She shouldnt be the blushing innocent girl. I hate that in shows. Make ber a strong female character. Also did she use a gun or what? And did she dig it up? Couldnt follow that part.

Anyway good luck.