|Reviews for Vampire Night|
| Guest chapter 2 . 6/27
Hey can i take this story for my use
| Reed456123 chapter 1 . 1/30/2018
I've only read the first chapter so far so this will be my first impression of this story, and my view point might change as I read more. In some ways, I feel like you're rushing the narrative a bit too much. In the first chapter of a story you should not only introduce your characters but also let the reader get to know them on an emotional level so they can connect with and care about what happens to them in the story. If the reader doesn't care about your characters, the story will be boring. After reading the first chapter, I don't know anything about Kim other than she got killed by a vampire, Detective Lots just comes off as the cliche "good cop" that's in a million other stories, and all I know about Tracey is that she's upset her friend died, which most people would be, that doesn't really give her a lot of depth as a character. You did a good job of creating the setting though, I can believe that vampires would attack somebody on a stormy-moonlit night.