|Reviews for My World and Theirs|
| Cynthia M chapter 1 . 5/4/2015
Wow. I enjoyed the rhythmic flow of one line to the next; this poem could easily be recited aloud, especially as it nears the end. As for lines, there were a few that stood out to me. Namely, "I've been poisoned too long... Do you care how I feel? Avoiding the wounds I just couldn't heal.../I must escape the digestion. I'm more than a freak." And the last four lines. I thought they were powerful... And the tone! I could hear the distaste and feel the oppression.
One minor grammatical error that I'll point out in an attempt to be helpful exists in the second last line. It's should be its. You're using the word in its possesive form, not as a conjuction of it is, so no apostrophe is needed. But yeah, that's the only error I could see. Otherwise, this was well written!
Anyways, thanks for the review; I thought I would return the favour.