|Reviews for Wasting Your Time|
| Jack Bellows chapter 1 . 6/16/2015
The capitalized letter is completely accidental... hehe, oops!
The chipper part is the persona's sarcasm. I mentioned it's a "sin to be sad," So despite being miserable, the persona has to pretend to be happy.
| atalantea chapter 1 . 6/14/2015
Your rhythm is very good. It flowed naturally and easily throughout. May I ask why cold was capitalized was it deliberate?
I like the beginning where you just described a typical day then bumped it up with the lesson line which I like best.
Now as the persona talks about having to pretend (and eventually having to waste his or her life) i ask, what do you mean by being chipper alone? Is that not a contradiction or the previous lines? Does chipper not mean happy? I am curious to know.
Anyway keep writing!