You just think that you melted into nothing, and I am so glad that you are still in the flesh. : )

This is heart breaking and beautiful

Well written, with some great imagery.

This is so sad, yet I imagine it being read in such a happy tone... Amazing.

Thought-provoking piece of poetry. I particularly liked how you captured the deep sadness and yet disconnect of the character... Very interesting.

Six ellipses scattered throughout the poem, a total of eighteen baseline dots. Perhaps analogous to the number of tiny tablets ingested?

You were right to scrap the original version. What would have made for a tedious story does work better in this format, as the sensation of creeping medicinal intoxication is best shown in a thin column of text (immediately vertical orientation calls attention to up-down, high-low, etc.) than block paragraphs (horizontal, fat, static).

In short, the poem succeeds in its execution, communicating well the actions and psychology of an overdose.

This was deep and beautiful. Nicely written and quite sad. I absolutely loved it.