Reviews for I Melted into Nothing and I'm Not Sorry
drfreet chapter 1 . 7/16/2015
You just think that you melted into nothing, and I am so glad that you are still in the flesh. : )
cupcakecoviello chapter 1 . 6/30/2015
This is heart breaking and beautiful
LorrahBear chapter 1 . 6/30/2015
Well written, with some great imagery.
Axolotl33 chapter 1 . 6/22/2015
This is so sad, yet I imagine it being read in such a happy tone... Amazing.
zanybellecloudo chapter 1 . 6/22/2015
Thought-provoking piece of poetry. I particularly liked how you captured the deep sadness and yet disconnect of the character... Very interesting.
M. Soames chapter 1 . 6/22/2015
Six ellipses scattered throughout the poem, a total of eighteen baseline dots. Perhaps analogous to the number of tiny tablets ingested?

You were right to scrap the original version. What would have made for a tedious story does work better in this format, as the sensation of creeping medicinal intoxication is best shown in a thin column of text (immediately vertical orientation calls attention to up-down, high-low, etc.) than block paragraphs (horizontal, fat, static).

In short, the poem succeeds in its execution, communicating well the actions and psychology of an overdose.
Shadow Dracow chapter 1 . 6/22/2015
This was deep and beautiful. Nicely written and quite sad. I absolutely loved it.