Reviews for the crane and the cross |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Hi there! I would like to invite you to join our platform to present a good quality story to our readers! Send me a message if this offer piqued your interest. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I have fallen in love with this story. Please update when you get the time. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I love how you're moulding and giving life to Ret. I can just feel him breathe, that's how alive his character is! Other character developments are commendable as well. :) The story flows perfectly. You're a master at writing and you should continue. This story is amazing. More power to you! Cheers. |
![]() ![]() Fantastic, as usual! |
![]() ![]() I love this story so much! |
![]() ![]() ![]() wonder how long Mich will stay clueless |
![]() ![]() A wonderful story,i feel lucky to have found this while browsing around. I feel really bad for Ret,i hope he finds his happiness soon. Looking forward to more. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Ughhhh. I'm reading this at work (shh. I'm also on my phone, so if I typo ridiculously, I'm sorry!), and wanted to shout for joy at Ret's 'I deserve better than this.' Yes! You do! (Be selfish for once, dude!) Also, I'm glad we're seeig more of Mich! (Have I said that?) My general dislike and frustration towards him is turning more towards curiosity. What's his deal, anyway? I'm guessing there's more there than meets the eye. And Benne, too-why not tell Mich? Is it the run of the mill fear of rejection, not wanting to ruin what they have kind of thing, or more, or? This is, without a doubt, my favorite thing I'm reading right now. The only thing I might offer for criticism is sometimes your dialogue tags get a little lost in the rest-it can be hard to tell who, exactly, is speaking. Generally, you fix any of that confusion later on through later dialogue or description, but honestly, it's a little thing. Gosh. Thanks so much for sharing this. It is an incredible read, and your characters are incredibly interesting. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Poor Ret. He has absolutely terrible luck. I love your writing. It's smooth and there is no meaningless moment. Everything is quick and to the point. I love how straightforward everything is. I'm surprised at how Ret has evolved and I'm hoping, hoping and hoping things go his way for once. Looking forward to updates, no matter how irregular they are. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Oh, my gosh. Even though I completely expected it (you do such a fantastic job of ramping things up), Benne's confession felt like someone hit me in the chest. :( Is there /any/ chance of Ret ever having nice things? Because, goodness. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I'm dying to read the rest! Thanks for writing this story and I look forward to the next part! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Heart wrenching! So good! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I'm glad for the interaction between them because I was hating Mich's guts. Now I feel ready for him to show me who he really is. |
![]() ![]() ![]() '"We?' Mich tilts his head up, eyes widening slightly. It's his questioning expression, perfected after years of use, to elicit the proper answer from whomever he deigns to ask. Ret's seen it used dozens of times, but he's never actually been subject to it before. It's a strange feeling, seeing his own face question him." I died when I read that. It just struck me to the heart. This is really great stuff. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Wow, just, wow. This is so beautifully written. You said that this story is a slow burn, well that's exactly how I'm going to read it - slowly, savoring every morsel. |