|Reviews for The Needle's Eye|
| theweekendpoetry chapter 2 . 11/1/2015
This is interesting. Hope you'll update soon. I'm dying to know what'll happen next :)
| rust phoenix chapter 2 . 8/24/2015
Creepy and interesting. You capture the character's naivete well.
| rust phoenix chapter 1 . 8/24/2015
Intriguing! I like the detail of the black ink and lamplight, and the voice of the character is fascinating.
| LorrahBear chapter 2 . 8/5/2015
Interesting! I wonder why they're taking them out to the forest and why the nurse told them to bring their treasures.
| TheSwanSong chapter 1 . 7/21/2015
I hope you welcome constructive criticism :)
It isn't a bad start but I think she has quite the diction for a nine year old. I think you should deconstruct it into shorter, simple sentences and less complicated words (e.g. 'empty notebook' instead of 'blank crummy notebook'). Maybe a couple misspelled words, too.
| LorrahBear chapter 1 . 7/21/2015
Only one small suggestion: you may have meant [past] the gates.
That being said, I'm so glad you're going to turn sewing and folding into a longer story! :)