Reviews for Personal Space
hadyen chapter 2 . 7/27/2015
plz update!
d plot z very nc
wan chapter 1 . 7/26/2015
its AWESOME! plzzzzz update soon!
eagerly waiting!
Lady Okra chapter 2 . 7/24/2015
I love it!

I like how things are progressing. There is not a moment of lull in this story.

Once again, I'd request you to proofread. Thank you for the wonderful read and the quick update! Good luck.
Lady Okra chapter 1 . 7/23/2015
I love it!

The story is well written. The characters are GOLD. I love both Maya and Dylan for their quirkiness. This story has potential and these two characters can develop into such a dynamic couple! I'm excited to see how far you can take this story.

I would request you to proofread. There are very minor errors here and there but the chapter would work very well without them. Also, since the water body is a lake, it should be "the lake bed" instead of "the sea floor."

One more suggestion: I'd like you to work on the descriptive part of the story. Your dialogues are amazingly well written. Your description needs more work in the sense that I personally felt that the water body appeared out of nowhere. If there was a little more description of what was going on around or a picture of what was around painted through the character's thoughts would improve the reading process.

Thank you for the wonderful read! I look forward to more.
HeadHusky chapter 1 . 7/21/2015
The summary is very sassy... I love it. Just like this story