Reviews for The Realm of Imagination |
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![]() ![]() love this story... never heard off the site though... link? |
![]() ![]() ![]() Yay, thanks for saying so, I'm going to go read it there :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() No idea what you talked about since i never thought FP is only for certain-age/certain-type readers. Please let us know if you decide to continue this story here or on another site, because i'd love to read your story! :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() T_T I was looking forward to this story *cries*. Regardless of anything, I just wanted to see what would happen next. Are you going to continue posting it elsewhere? Or if you don't want to touch it for now, can you tell me a little about what you intended to happen? An itty bitty summary would so I don't go insane _ . On a side note, I think at least half of the readers here have grown up with fictionpress and are around the age of your heroine, or at least over their mid 20s. As more picky readers it's kinda hard to find a story that doesn't sound too immature. Don't mean to insult anyone, but I've stumbled on enough vampire's slave girls to start rolling my eyes already (simply not for my demographic anymore lol). So I think there's plenty of readers who'll enjoy the type of story you had in mind. In any case, give me spoilers T_T... |
![]() ![]() ![]() Aww that's okay you are the author and if you don't feel comfortable with it then pull it. It was a great idea though and who knows one day you might come back to it. Looking forward to reading your next story :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() There r so many other stories that are ten times worse than yours, but eh |
![]() ![]() OH MY GOoooD this is so cool! What twists, what turns, what strangeness and charm! I'm so glad I stumbled upon this! |
![]() ![]() Everything about this story calls to me - I adore its premise and its main character already. I am most certainly interested - please write more :3! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hmm, so Candace was struck by lightening huh? For a minute, I thought this might be a "Lost in Austen" type situation, where they both switch places - and in the beginning I was like "dream within a dream"...Inception, lol. Especially when you set it in NY, the land of skyscrapers! And also, Sarah remains in this reality, but will Derek's head be turned by her? Especially, when Melanie followed through with a faint! Just like the original Sarah! Still I'm curious, about how the innocent virgin replaced by the cuckolded soon-to-be-divorcee will throw the original plot off course. Because Melanie would have experience - and much higher expectations! |
![]() ![]() ![]() She was gone already? :O Whoah... Don't expect she was back that fast! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Oooh, you didn't disappoint with that fast update. I admit I've been checking my mail all day in case you posted something haha. So, I kinda loved that dream within a dream, its conclusion to be more specific. It deserved many lol's with how abrupt and unexpected it was. Though in a sense, it's not as funny when you consider it stems from Mel's insecurity. The end of the chapter got serious fast. I was already thinking Mel was struck by lightening, so this kind of reaffirmed my guess. Though I'm really hoping she'll stay in the book world forever. Who needs reality -_- |
![]() ![]() ![]() You know what you've done? You've created a genre savvy character, but she's aware she's genre savvy, and it's played for laughs. You've created a reality within a "reality" and it's like the fourth wall is broken with her, in the fantasy world she's inhabiting, but it's not broken with us - the audience. That's what captured my interest. And also the relatively mature female lead. I'm fascinated. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I love the idea that his arrogance is a turn on in the bool but not in the flesh. And I love the skewering of the expectations of the genre - he's meant to be getting a virginal ingenuee (urgh, I hate the fetishisation of female virginity as a trope) who can melt his icy heart but instead gets a grumpy thirty something embittered by the breakup of her marriage. One piece of concrit for ch 1. I'm now old enough to have watched a few friends' marriages break up, sometimes due to adultery. If you want this to come across as realistic you need to portray the process as a lot more drawn out and painful - the flat denial, the admission of an emotional connection but "nothing physical", the admission of a kiss "but no further", finally (when she discovers evidence in form of sexts) the admission coupled to some sort of attempt to shift the blame "you haven't been doing xyz". I don't think I've ever seen an "are you having an affair?" - "yes". |
![]() ![]() ![]() This story reminds me of a Korean drama. I am so following this story! Please, please, do continue writing. |
![]() ![]() ![]() And since I spent the previous review on raving about you definitely continuing this story, let me use this one for some story raving haha. I notice it's a repeat mistake women do, and I personally know a woman who went through the exact same thing, though she still had two daughters in high school when her husband decided to split for a younger woman. They also married fresh out of high school, she also worked to support him while he went on to college, and the rest is as you'd expect, with the only twist that he was also abusive. I think the moment a woman lets her man rely on her financially, he stops seeing her as a woman, and more as a mother who takes care of him, instead of him putting the effort to take care of her. It's just a theory I've come up with after hearing about the same sad story over and over again. You'd think women will learn one day not to do this. Because sure enough, their men would find another woman who's never had to take care of another person like that, who's had time and money to go to the hair stylist, put on make up, buy pretty clothes, and look fresh. While the woman they leave at home has spent every side penny on him or their kids, has been frugal so the household can survive, and has devoted their life and youth to them. Of course, Melanie has the right to be pissed off. Wouldn't blame her if she killed him. Phew, that was a rant... I was kinda hoping she'd immerse herself in the 'dream' and jump Mr. Arrogant's bones, confuse him to no end lol. But it speaks of her character that even in her 'dream' she can't let go of the cultured persona. Excited to see how it goes :3. More more more! |