Okay. Seriously. You literally just described my first time at a bar in a nutshell. And I'm talking about Joyce's P.O.V... Yeah, I know. Insane.
I really like this story so far. It's unique and really different from most of the stories I've read and am currently reading. I really hope you continue with this.
I feel so... like Joyce that it's almost insane to think that I could relate so much to someone who I barely know (and is a fictional character, I'm not crazy quite yet...), but then I feel so far away reading from David's point of view and how he views the girl and how he thinks and how he sees everything that's going on around him. It's quite awesome, actually to read from his viewpoint!
Anyway, I hope you continue this. It's really quite great so far. I can't wait to read more and good luck with future chapters! ツ