|Reviews for Crescent Island|
| BradytheJust chapter 17 . 12/10/2016
And that is why we never follow strangers! Seriously guys... basic rule of thumb for a new city!
The description of the old town was spot on, and I even had to re-read it a bit when I saw the word "telephone." Wouldn't that be out of place? Then your next line confirmed it... yay me!
I also liked the concept that everyone was considered normal, and no one hid who they were in the city... I think the group could really find a forever home here.
Amazing chapter as always! :)
| Yakosh chapter 16 . 11/11/2016
Nice. Can't wait for a new chapter.
| BradytheJust chapter 16 . 10/12/2016
Awww ;) Thanks for the shout out my friend, but hey you are writing this wonderful story. I just tell you how great it is! :) Glad to be supportive for you! (and I love sappiness! Makes me feel good!)
Onto the review,
Another perfect fight scene, not just the battle, but also the scenes where Luna was concerned with her appearance, Fallena flashed the boys (and to be honest I think any guy would have ogled at that), and the family acted like just that... a family. It just made everything awesome and added that bit of flair to the fight scene.
I also liked how you used fire to overcome regenerative abilities, it's a tried and true method!
Also just some grammar nitpicking: "Was I fight(ing) beside Luna..."
"Happened to Collide" (no -ed) and "So I did not have to say "any" more (instead of no more)
All in all, a perfect chapter and I can't wait to see what happens next! :D
| BradytheJust chapter 15 . 9/27/2016
Oh, traps... this doesn't look good.
Okay, the 'episode' with Serene really connected with me. I have autism, and I get overwhelmed very easily especially with loud noise. You did a very good job showing the symptoms of a panic attack (heavy sweating, labored breathing, the need for hugs) and I felt a deeper connection to Serene.
But now they are caught in the trap... this can't be good! Another perfect chapter as always, keep it up!
| BradytheJust chapter 14 . 9/16/2016
Well, Serene is smarter than me, I would have slain my attackers and hunted for Rhea myself, but being led there is smart too.
You've done a perfect job with this chapter. Fallena's question about anyone loving her for something more than her looks was a valid one, and it made her seem so real. The conversation between her and Serene was perfect and made them seem even more like a family.
The appearance of Ulrich's vampire family makes for good antagonists for Serene's family and I can see some conflict really arising with them. Why do they want Rhea's gift? I can really see some Vampire vs Vampire/elemental action coming out :D
Perfect story my friend! Keep it up!
| BradytheJust chapter 13 . 8/30/2016
Alright, first a connection that I have to this story. Luna's little problem with blood. Having those paragraphs on her freak out and how it affected her really spoke to me as I have the same problem with noise.
I can't be in crowds, in loud rooms, or in a too loud too chaotic area without freezing up or breaking down and having to leave. So it felt really good to let Luna have a weakness to the sight of blood because it made her more human.
Also, I can just see an Angel just explaining to the Gods how they 'dropped' two gifted babies down to Earth. That guy is getting fired... :)
Awwww, I love Rhea! She is so cute and lovable and I want to hug her so bad! I can tell she's going to be fun to write and read about!
Abously incredible Zukafu! :D Keep it up!
| BradytheJust chapter 12 . 8/15/2016
Okay first the review, then a surprise.
You did a wonderful job describing the city life and the apprehension of Serene and her family at seeing the different people that lived in the city. It was a very well written scene, especially as you had the tension build up as Serene got closer to finding her gift.
The battle scene was wonderful and very well written (even better than mine!) And the way you described the scene was equal parts thrilling and suspenseful, and the little girl was perfect! And so cute! :D
Anyway I figure you deserve a sneak peek at IWIW and I plan to have a plotline where the Brotherhood of Shadows makes its intentions known and they have a 'ceremony' very much like the one you described (evil chanting, knife, tied down victim, hoods) and Brevan and Co will be forced to turn to some unlikely allies for help. So I'll really be using this chapter to help flesh out the scene. So thank you for helping me out!
Have a great day and amazing chapter as always!
| BradytheJust chapter 11 . 8/9/2016
This chapter was AMAZING! I really love the family banter in the party, most quests see a bunch of best friends or strangers working together, but a family on a mission opens so many possibilities! :D
I also liked how Serene thought of the diversity of their powers, and how by working together they could adapt to find new ways to defeat their enemies.
This chapter had humor, character development, and a cliffhanger. Great work and I can't wait to explore the city!
| BradytheJust chapter 10 . 7/31/2016
It's really good to see you back! :D *hugs you*
I've fought a ton of wolves in Skyrim and other games, and you did a wonderful job describing the wolves, how they fight, and how they appeared out of the woods! (Trust me even in games, they appear out of nowhere! :O)
The fight was wonderfully written, and you did a great job describing how the different members of the family fought, with magic and blade. I could see the entire fight in my minds eye!
I also loved how Luna and Serene just sat on the sidelines until they got bored, then entered the fray. Another amazing chapter! :)
| BradytheJust chapter 9 . 6/11/2016
Oh my gosh!
Alright Zukafu, I might have said this before but I want you to ignore it and instead apply it to this chapter
This is the greatest chapter you've ever written. No joke, it is beyond perfect.
The characterization was spot on with this chapter, Fallena's one-sided romance with Felix was wonderfully written (and trust me, I know about one-sided romance) and I could really feel the tension, especially the lines "Why settle for less, when you could have Fallena" and "He was mine, I saw him first" I could really feel the anger behind these statements, and I really hope Serene gets her man!
15 out of 10 stars for this chapter, and keep it up! :D :D :D
P.S: Ha, I beat Serene, I was ALREADY thinking about bunnies before she said "think about bunnies" They are so cute! :D
| BradytheJust chapter 8 . 4/16/2016
Another great chapter :)
Well Serene might be in love! Yay! :)
I really liked how you described the family as Dhampirs, as it was a big shock (vegetarian vampires? That took some getting used too) but it was described well enough that I went with it.
Your description of Serene's dream guy was spot on, and I could see why she might be falling for him.
Wonderful job as usual. Keep it up!
| BradytheJust chapter 7 . 4/9/2016
*gasps* Ducky! :D
Sorry I just have a fondness for ducks, rubber or otherwise. :)
Once again another perfect chapter. I really liked how you described Serene's fear of water as "cups are fine and drops are really a hinderance, but when there's a lot..." Wonderful line there.
I also enjoyed how you described Diggory with his crazy attire, and how Luna found the logical side to the boat problem.
Great job and keep it up! I wasn't expecting a duck, but I love it!
| BradytheJust chapter 6 . 3/25/2016
Well its a chapter full of goodbyes!
I really love these kinds of chapters, as it really shows the main character just how many people care about them and wish them "Good travels and Safe return."
You just added this chapter to my list of the chapters I love :)
I think it was the last paragraph that really drove the point home for me. "That meant someone, someone I loved dearly, could be hurt or worse very soon." This isn't a group of best friends or companions thrown together by chance, this is a family. No bonds are stronger than family, but those bonds are also the hardest to heal once they've been broken.
I can't wait for the start of the journey! :)
| MariaTJackson chapter 1 . 3/20/2016
This is one great way to start a story! I love the POV for this narrative as its very individual and in times I found it highly amusing.
I really look forward to reading this one and seeing where Serene's story will lead. Keep up the good work and I'll go read your other chapters!
| BradytheJust chapter 5 . 2/15/2016
Another great chapter!
I really liked seeing more of Serene's relationship with her sisters and her mother. Having Fallena be jealous of Serene's beauty simply because she looked like her mother was was a really good conflict to start off the story, and the journey hasn't even started yet! :)
Great job as usual and keep it up!