|Reviews for Tongue of the Dead|
| Hikitsune-Red chapter 1 . 9/2/2015
What a lovely piece woven together by both worldly words, and those of the next!
I simply adore how poetic this piece is in its own right, and the clear heart you put into it.
Very well written.
| AlysonSerenaStone chapter 1 . 8/29/2015
Really an emotional story here! I loved your words, the language, and what heart you seemed to have put into this! This is such an amazing and beautiful piece of art!
| TanteLiz chapter 1 . 8/28/2015
Well done, sir. Love the mythological base (although I would have liked to be cruising around on a barge, rather than overhead), the gradual integration of the language, and the sectional divisions. In particular, section 7 stands out - as a former hospice nurse, I know those last words to be truth.
I will admit to a moment of gut punch at reading pancreatic adenocarcinoma - that's what got my Dad at age 66, and I remember dreaming of waiting for him in a conference room after he died, and him running in for a quick visit (with his CFO smile), apologizing that he couldn't stay long as he was 'in-between meetings'...
| SuitedManatee chapter 1 . 8/27/2015
If the afterlife involves learning a new language then I opt for being poked by pointy things in a toasty pit. It just sounds like less hassle.
But it's a neat idea. I'm into this sort of pseudo modern-mythology thing. And Egyptian mythology has always been a favourite of mine.
I also like how the Muhit becomes more and maha integrated as the story progresses without ever seeming too ambiguous.
| augie.toaste chapter 1 . 8/26/2015
Great stuff, as always, but I think you have outdone yourself this time. Very much a fan of how the words weave their way into the story. It is 100% faithful to the prompt, and all the better for it. Love the back and fourth between death and afterlife. Love the ending. :)
| Emerald Viper chapter 1 . 8/19/2015
Hot damn, Coyote! This is extraordinary. I love the slightly science-fiction Egyptian underworld. It reminds me a little of Zelazny's Lords of Light which believe-you-me, is really high praise. I wasn't too keen on my own story this go around, and now I'm embarrassed. Way to up the game! This is something I'd seriously submit to a magazine or something.
The lack of caps in your invented language kinda looks weird in some places, although I suppose that's a style choice. I really can't nitpick anything else.