What a lovely piece woven together by both worldly words, and those of the next!
I simply adore how poetic this piece is in its own right, and the clear heart you put into it.

Very well written.

Really an emotional story here! I loved your words, the language, and what heart you seemed to have put into this! This is such an amazing and beautiful piece of art!

Well done, sir. Love the mythological base (although I would have liked to be cruising around on a barge, rather than overhead), the gradual integration of the language, and the sectional divisions. In particular, section 7 stands out - as a former hospice nurse, I know those last words to be truth.

I will admit to a moment of gut punch at reading pancreatic adenocarcinoma - that's what got my Dad at age 66, and I remember dreaming of waiting for him in a conference room after he died, and him running in for a quick visit (with his CFO smile), apologizing that he couldn't stay long as he was 'in-between meetings'...

If the afterlife involves learning a new language then I opt for being poked by pointy things in a toasty pit. It just sounds like less hassle.
But it's a neat idea. I'm into this sort of pseudo modern-mythology thing. And Egyptian mythology has always been a favourite of mine.
I also like how the Muhit becomes more and maha integrated as the story progresses without ever seeming too ambiguous.

Great stuff, as always, but I think you have outdone yourself this time. Very much a fan of how the words weave their way into the story. It is 100% faithful to the prompt, and all the better for it. Love the back and fourth between death and afterlife. Love the ending. :)

Hot damn, Coyote! This is extraordinary. I love the slightly science-fiction Egyptian underworld. It reminds me a little of Zelazny's Lords of Light which believe-you-me, is really high praise. I wasn't too keen on my own story this go around, and now I'm embarrassed. Way to up the game! This is something I'd seriously submit to a magazine or something.

The lack of caps in your invented language kinda looks weird in some places, although I suppose that's a style choice. I really can't nitpick anything else.