|Reviews for Long Ago|
| joeehartley chapter 1 . 8/23/2015
A creation story and very cute. I'm not sure al the pronouns need to be capitalized. It is the name of the first so it is named It. But her, he's, they etc need not be capitalized.
| Aske Nat chapter 1 . 8/22/2015
An interesting little thing; I like the idea, and you have obviously put some thought into it. There was only one little thing:
(They knew not of time like we do, for time does not effect them.) - Shouldn't it be affect?
Anyway; good work.