|Reviews for Human Defaults|
| Jack Bellows chapter 1 . 3/27/2016
I was looking for something to think about so, of course, I would browse through some of your older pieces...
This was a real treat and really expresses the things people shove aside. It's sad, but reassuring that there are other people out there who understand that the world almost feels unlivable when people neglect the very things that make us human.
Wonderfully Written (Keep Writing!)
| SeySey chapter 1 . 10/28/2015
So, I'm not sure if I understand... It sounds like the person talking is first saying that all other people pretty much suck and only care about themselves. But then the narrator does nothing himself? I guess that may be becuase he realizes he can't change the world himself and gives up? Is that the horrible feeling, that he can't fix it, so he might as well be like all the others and not make a change? IDK, this confuses me BIG TIME. But I think it it very interesting :D And for a non-English native, your writing is crazy good.
| AnonymousProclamations chapter 1 . 10/24/2015
Interesting poem that you have constructed here. I don't feel like some of the stanzas go together, but it is sort of mind pinching; It is like some other similar stuff that I have come across. I feel like the speaker comes off as selfish (not sure if that was intentional). It reminds me of a high school teen more than it reminds me of a college student or anything else (though it mentions a lecture). The need to be the center and to think that it is their fault for the world's faults which is a selfish notion really draw that feeling in.
Common thought shared by many, good job.
| Carmel March chapter 1 . 10/11/2015
Again, you touch on such a real thing, such a real topic and concern in today's world. It really resonated with me. Amazing job!
| venatianwings chapter 1 . 10/9/2015
I think this is lovely and thought provoking. The title very apt. Did you mean to write 'top of the tongue' or 'tip of the tongue'?
| zanybellecloudo chapter 1 . 10/4/2015
Amazingly insightful workings of the human conscious. I too don't forget the other world of "hell" which can seemingly never be fixed. Life is indeed a mix of fate which is unfair to the blindest eye. This was a real prominent and sobering reflection on how this is simply forgotten... but not by us all, as you rightly prove. Excellently written. Thanks for sharing!