Reviews for Life and Death two haiku
Bob Story Builder chapter 1 . 12/9/2015
My my my! What intriguing comparisons! The first haiku evokes powerful imagery and emotions I think. What comes to mind for me is corkscrewing through the sky with knowledge that all will be okay (it is not the most defined thing I have said but I do not want to lose my impressions). Also the memories don't have to be constrained to one life but also all the lives that one life touched. The mist is memories shared by those touched. The second haiku is oooh so slap to the face powerful. I think it bounces off where the last haiku left off but that is me! Very effective metaphor! Love these two!
MTveit chapter 1 . 10/8/2015
I really like this poem. The comparison between death and ink is so simple, yet brilliant. Thanks for sharing your work!
venatianwings chapter 1 . 10/8/2015
Like! Striking imagery and perfect metering.