Reviews for Ember's Heart
hannaxD chapter 90 . 9/9/2017
Forgot there was this epilogue..
Right! Its an opening for a continuation I will be exploring soon :)
Best wishes,
Hanna
hannaxD chapter 89 . 9/9/2017
Such a beautiful ending!
Enjoyed reading this story from start to ending! :)
A bit slow at times, but that could have been my impatiance.. Probably that.. Anyways!
Thank you so much for sharing your writing!
Had fun,
Hanna
Rose chapter 36 . 11/12/2016
chapter 36 and still craving more. Loving the story! You've done an excellent job in making this world and these characters of yours come to life.
Ray-Anne chapter 90 . 10/21/2016
I am surprised this does not have more notice. It is really quite good. Super easy to get into and nice quick chapters to not get bogged down in. I'm not a huge fan of the huge religious aspect of it. Mostly because of its mirroring of Christianity. I think it would have been better more vague. Especially since you seemed like you were going that way at first but then it became more and more like Christianity.

I was a bit confused with her transformation. You had some bits where exciting things were happening so you got choppy - it did great for the flow and making the reader feel that excitement - unfortunately it also made me have to read things twice over to make sure I understood everything. For example I had to reread the fight scene with Kaim and reread the transformation with Ember/Ori.

I'm a bit bummed that Ember was not terribly impressive. She's constantly fainting and struggling (which is nice, good to have a main character who actually struggles) but I would have liked to see more scenes of her scary wit either at the dinner table or with the counsel. I liked Kaim's character and wouldn't mind seeing more of him throughout the story as well.

Overall it was well written, you had a beautiful backstory/world building/cultures/people and landscape and the mixture of fantasy and modern technology and whatnot was fascinating to see and read. It didn't seem awkward or forced. It flowed nicely although often written like one would speak and not overly detailed. (Although fair, you could probably throw in more detail here and there.)

I liked that the prince was an engineer. So nice to get away from prince being the ultimate fight guy.

Kudos, it was a very enjoyable read. Kind of a Bitterwood ish,
Redache chapter 90 . 9/19/2016
Oooooh. Is this a sequel promised? Or a continuation?
O'Conner chapter 90 . 9/18/2016
Okay now that was very illuminating! Are we gonna get the next part of the trilogy as you say? Is the second book finished? Are you gonna put it up? It really is a fantastic story and you have done a marvellous job!
VendettaSmiles chapter 90 . 9/18/2016
The battle is won, but the war continues...

I do wonder what he will think when he finds out the alleji bears his grandson/daughter. Hmm...

Thank you again for sharing this great story.

Vendetta
O'Conner chapter 89 . 9/17/2016
Finally they marry! What a lovely chapter! Keep them coming! Brilliant story!
O'Conner chapter 88 . 9/11/2016
Thankyou thankyou thankyou brilliant chapter! Can't wait for the next one!
O'Conner chapter 87 . 9/11/2016
Yes! Evil cliffhanger monster !
jgardner13 chapter 87 . 9/8/2016
To answer your question on the new name, personally not a fan. I spent most of the chapter thinking "who the heck is this person?" About midway through, I kind of figured out who it was but I wasn't certain until the author's note. As I've mentioned before, you like to use different names to refer to the same person or species. That in and of itself can be okay, if the significance of the different names is clearly stated, which it hasn't been. As a result, it tends to be very confusing for the reader. I recommend keep it simple with the names or make the distinction clear.
Redache chapter 86 . 9/3/2016
I want more. Love your writing, combining external and internal struggle enriches it further. Still fighting even in the aftershock of an explosion is completely amazing. He's one tough cookie.
VendettaSmiles chapter 86 . 9/3/2016
Another chapter from Kaim's pov. I am glad as I have an affection for the growth and development of side characters as well as main characters (after all, we're all side characters in someone else's story;)

Kaim's realization here was great. I like the way you didn't over tell it but still made it clear.

Nicely done.

Vendetta
O'Conner chapter 86 . 9/3/2016
Brilliant chapter! Can't wait for the next one! I got lost there a little at the end and had to think a little bit but I got it now! Lol
O'Conner chapter 85 . 8/18/2016
Brilliant story! The last couple of chapters were great can't wait for the next!
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