|Reviews for Fairy Tale for NYC Midnight 2016 Round 1 - THE DEVIL'S CUT|
| Shelly Sanders chapter 1 . 2/4/2016
The plot and ending are excellent; great twist! To make the story resonate more with readers, you need to show characters through their actions rather than tell. For example, more dialogue between Becki and Lucifer, show headline reporting her death. Also, there were a couple of awkward sentences: "...just as she thought she would do anything to get a real gold record." "...blaming his harsh words on the grief."
Good luck with the challenge!
| Guest chapter 1 . 1/29/2016