Reviews for The Man that Lost his Shadow
Supernatural 3878 chapter 1 . 8/6/2018
Nice work! This is quite an fascinating read in my opinion, what I liked most about it is the idea of the setting that you've given the readers; it's very well thought out, you've got some really nice word choices, got some imagery...plenty of good things in there. Aside from the grammatical and spelling errors, I do think that you would also need to work on the flow of your story. Here's the thing, we as writers, oftentimes tends to skip the part where we read over our writings after we're done, this is a common mistake. If we do not go back and analyze our writing pieces to make any necessary changes, there won't be any improvements. My advice is that you double check everything you've wrote just to make sure that it's smooth (maybe even read it out loud if it helps). But nevertheless, you've done an amazing job and I certainly look forward to seeing more works from you. :)
Ckh chapter 1 . 6/13/2018
I felt that the ending lacked a bit of a punch, compared to the earlier setup. It doesn't leave a lingering sense of creepiness like other horror stories, in part due to it feeling incomplete, as if it were part of a larger story. For a first attempt at writing a horror story, I do have to commend you on the description of the cat. Though this story wasn't fleshed out, I'm impressed by what it is.
JaveHarron chapter 1 . 12/31/2017
Hi,
Thought the story could use some improvements. The psychiatrist might be opened to the idea of the supernatural, but he doesn't suggest alternative explanations or ideas. There's a number of grammatical and text errors, and similarly, the writing itself needs improvement. There's very little allusions or metaphors, so it seems dry and plodding (although quite fixable). The ending similarly seems more like an opening for a longer story, but the grammar of the last statement needs a closer look.
AeroSakura chapter 1 . 4/28/2017
I LOVED the idea of this story I'd liketo read more one day. The way you set in the atmosphere is near flawless.I like the relationship between the phychiatrist and the guy I ship themī¸.
SpringWriter777 chapter 1 . 2/20/2017
Good story, reminded me of the vanishing cat.
Lady Crimsoncrow chapter 1 . 12/3/2016
I feel like you wanted to do an H.P. Lovecraft kind of thing, but because this is only one thousand words its missing the detail that gave his work the edge that made Lovecraft so well loved. I don't know if the work count was intentional or if you wanted to write down the base idea of a story before forgot and decided to post for some reason. I feel like something can be made here, but not in its current form.
ATL33 chapter 1 . 11/30/2016
this is cool, i like how u drew on life experience too
ATACLC chapter 1 . 11/29/2016
Ok... mehh. It was fine, though you could have added like, a second chapter, but that cliffhanger is good enough for young horror readers...
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