|Reviews for Flights of Icarus|
| Dante Wallace's Ghost chapter 1 . 8/5/2016
I really liked your style and the vivid imagery used, this was a powerful piece that also sounded quite poetic to me. I really enjoyed reading this!
| R.M.Spencer chapter 1 . 5/28/2016
You clearly know how to write, there is some very well done imagery in this piece, but I think you get a bit carried away. The description of anger is pretty, but way too much. I also feel like you haven't answered the "So what?" factor. He is mad and trudges on and on, on this seemingly unending path and becomes more and more numb. So what? The summary indicates that he was in a village? Tell me more about that, about him, about why he is on this path. Tell me why I should care.
| LorrahBear chapter 1 . 5/12/2016
I love your repetition of the step by step, particularly early on when you deviate to step by step by bleeding step.
I might suggest using more contractions - using so few (none at all?) feels super formal, which doesn't quite fit the tone I think you're going for. Of course, I could be very wrong! :)
Overall, I really loved this. Very well done. :)
| Richard S. O'Day chapter 1 . 4/18/2016
While I am not quite sure what is going on it, but I do enjoy it. Your descriptions are detailed but leave enough ambiguity for the readers imagination to frantically try and decipher what is going on. The narrator has an extremely interesting way of viewing the world and themselves.
I could not find any mistakes at all in this work.
I really enjoyed this and look forward to more!
P.S. Sorry about the big delay in returning your review.