Reviews for An Invitation to Artemis
LorrahBear chapter 1 . 4/23/2016
I enjoyed how you managed to paint such a vivid picture, even as it shifted. There were a few spots where I felt like the punctuation/capitalizing was slightly off (ie: "tiny planets caught in the orbits of ourselves./or stargazers drunk on absence like absinth..." Should the period be gone, or the O be capitalized?)

I also enjoyed the repetition of "Come out with me."

Well done!
Victoria Best chapter 1 . 3/17/2016
Wow, this was really powerful. I love the imagery, particularly the image of the stretching shadows at the end of the poem, together with the line, "there is more to the night than misdirection." There was something just so meaningful to that line. There is a whole story held just in that one line. The same goes for the line "space that remains after the touch of bodies." Loved both lines.

I also enjoyed the repetition of "come out with me," giving the poem a songlike, almost dreamlike feel, complementing the dream-like imagery throughout the piece, like the mention of dancing and slow spinning.

Wonderful read. Good luck in the WCC!
TanteLiz chapter 1 . 3/11/2016
This. Damn, Solemn!