|Reviews for That Moment|
| atalantea chapter 1 . 4/3/2016
Ahhh the bitter pill we have all chocked on at least once. I think a lot of people can relate to your moment. I would suggest being more deliberate in repeating words/phrases. It is a great literary tool to highlight things. In your piece you have the line "Just sucking it up" and holding it in" which is similar to your ending "With sayings and words that I held in.". I feel like it would have more impact if the "holding in" happened only once. But then again, maybe it's just me.