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| andrewmerrigan chapter 1 . 4/18/2016
Hi! I read somewhere that doubling up metaphors will make people not like your writing, and you have the doubled metaphor of the broken doll and the feather. You can probably fix this by sticking to the porcelain image, I've seen videos of porcelain degrading and turning to dust; which could then be blown away by the wind.