|Reviews for Defenseless|
| zomblien89 chapter 1 . 9/2/2017
awesome outcome! you go, girl!
| Cowboy-4-Christ chapter 1 . 9/14/2016
Yikes. Though I know quite a few girls who I wouldn't be surprised if they carried knives.
| VictoriaRose0013 chapter 1 . 9/7/2016
Wow, nice! Keep up the good writing!
| RaisingDad chapter 1 . 4/23/2016
Alfred Hitchcock used to publish suspense magazines and books that featured, um, suspense stories and mysteries. I could very easily see this story featured in them. And, hey, I was just as surprised as those college guys were when she pulled out that Bowie knife.
| LorrahBear chapter 1 . 4/23/2016
This is a really solid first chapter. You've definitely caught my attention, and I'm so interested to learn more about your character and her ability to protect herself at such young age.
Initially, I was confused because I misread your summary, and thought she was an eleven year old, and was like "no way is this an eleven year old!" So on that note, I would say you've done a great job of making your character young, but not too young. She definitely reads like you intended.
Only one typo that I noticed: "...cursing herself as [every] type of obvious fool..."
| Zukafu Chiriamoto chapter 1 . 4/20/2016
Well, I didn't expect a turn quite like that... Excuse me as I sit a little awestruck from the sheer badassery... Okay, better now.
I thought this was a really descriptive piece, rife with tension and dramatic atmosphere.
I really really liked it. Happy writing!
| Brievel chapter 1 . 4/19/2016
Oh. 0_0 Wow. The writing is riveting... although the names show a distinctly Western tint. o_0 xD
| BradytheJust chapter 1 . 4/19/2016
Jeez, put that frogsticker away! Just hold on...
*goes behind alleyway and beats the heck out of the college boys*
Okay onto the review: I really liked how you used the line "Faced down the pack" it really made it feel like she was being hunted. I also liked how you said "Steel nerve and steel blade"
Your writing was wonderful as always and you really put a lot of emotion into your character. Great job my friend :)