That was a great story! You pulled me in on that one! I like how Simon Wendell managed to help out in solving a mystery and how it helped root out some corrupt Galaxy Rangers! You've really showed your potential in the matter of original works! The grammar needs a bit of work, but it's nothing that a good round of editing couldn't fix. I hope to see more stories in the future, Master Rainwalker! Or Master Animeman73, as you're called here!

I enjoyed this story. The opening action drew me in. I think there may be too many characters for such a short piece, however. I kept on getting some of them mixed up. Regardless, I found the protagonist engaging and the story fun to read.

Hey Thomas, Great Start to this Orginal Story. I look forward to saying more. Keep up the good work my freind.

This is off to a good start, Onii-san. I look forward to where this story will go.