|Reviews for Tales From The Front Line|
| LDF chapter 1 . 5/27
[for the means to evacuate the citizens of an entire continent.]
Really? A whole continent? Is it the size of a city? Otherwise this seems really extreme, as the amount of energy these bombs are emitting to wipe out a whole continent is probably enough to destroy the rest of the world as well.
[but she managed to make steady progress until a nearby blast sent her sprawling.]
Hm, is this the shockwave? Otherwise I'd imagine a lot more damage being done around her surroundings other than being knocked on the ground and someone trodding on her hand.
Otherwise, this is pretty good. There are large paragraphs though, which can easily be split into several smaller ones.