|Reviews for Rebel Children of Malice Leaf 1|
| DWaaM chapter 1 . 7/17/2016
This story left me very confused, I'm afraid.
Little to no details or backstory for what is clearly a fantasy world. In addition, the narration was often confusing, often jumping from one point to another in almost a flash. Sometimes entire sentences end up being incoherent: "Here I was in Greenfeldun our just rebellion." I am unsure what this sentence is trying to convey in its second half. There are also numerous problems with puncuation, mostly with commas.
Overall, not entirely interesting or enjoyable to read, I'm afraid. I am left intrigued, but that's only because it's quite hard to understand the writing.
Still, best of luck with your future projects!
| jackbharucha chapter 1 . 7/17/2016
Very interesting. I have no idea why these people are rebelling, or where this story is going, but I want to know.