Reviews for Vhanaiel
Fundle chapter 1 . 6/21/2019
I’m really sad you deleted all three of your original works I found them fascinating as they for your new ideas... I can say asexual...gender fluid is hard to write. And confusing for the reader lots of times. Especially for the people who have already read both stories. I understand that a lot of writers want to go back and change their works cause they are not happy with them. But lots of your readers were happy with them. Half the reason I found and read your stories in the first place were because they were slash. The other half was because the plot line was mysterious. I don’t think I’d want to read a rewrite with the same plot lines but different details. Just because you want to change something doesn’t mean you should ignored your old efforts. Please post your old works. And mark these new ones as rewrites. You don’t have to scrap the old just because you have new ideas.
chrono.414 chapter 44 . 8/7/2018
Wow... it's indescribable what you have just written. I have read fanfiction for many years and only recently stumbled on fictionpress, but this is the first time I am posting a review for ANY story I have read. I love your writing, and the emotional rollercoaster ride this story has been. I cried so hard after the battle at Adjeroun (or however you spell that), and the scene of Sharle's reunion with Halviore when they got to the haven - that was so spot on.

That said, I just felt that the last few chapters could have been written with more impact, particularly the scene where Azare was telling Vhanaiel about how he had misunderstood Sharle's explanation of why he had reopened his wounds. You had been dragging on the misunderstanding for the entire story and the resolution felt slightly less emotional than it could have been (we didn't see what Vhanaiel was feeling). I could also have wished for a viewpoint closer to the action or emotion in the final chapter than Asemodea's. I understand it was to explain Sharle's backstory, but the distance muted a little the sense of closure of the final battle.

Still, all those are minor compared to the absolutely phenomenal story you have written. I have only read Leika and this so far, and I wish you had written more than the 2 other ones that I am eagerly looking forward to reading. Thanks for sharing your talent, and keep on writing!
Guest chapter 44 . 6/8/2018
Just read this for the first time. What a fantastic story! So much depth; it gave me all the feels i was hoping for. I have not been able to put this down for the last few days. Thank you for this, such well written pieces are hard to come by
esde chapter 10 . 10/13/2017
that was sooo hot
esde chapter 2 . 10/13/2017
yeah im hella confused
esde chapter 1 . 10/13/2017
haha AN is awesome))
Mikealfaxray chapter 44 . 9/26/2017
God. You've made me fall in love with you. I loved Vhanaiel. It was beautiful, it was awe-inspiring. I've tried to write before but just reading your stories makes me realize I'll never be able to write anything as amazing as you.
The whole novel was intricate, spellbinding. Each character was alive. Vhan and Sharleon were so real, so fascinating, so complex. I had to read every single bit of this story with precision to fully realize, comprehend, explore their actions, their thoughts, feelings, their history. Even those that were written to be unlikable were still relatable and while they were weren't the most likable characters, I still liked them. Gosh, and the world building was fantastic, amazing. So many imagination, the creativity It was immersive, and I was captivated. Each place they went, every thing they saw, I saw too. I traveled the world right along with them, the Naulenaube, Vhan, Sharleon.
And I loved reading all your author's notes, and even the replies to reviewers that had the pleasure to read each chapter as you posted. It gives more details to the story, and it gives insight to how you created such a beautiful piece of work. It makes me see just how much thought you put into it.
I was honestly captivated the whole way through. I did have to take some breaks in between though. I couldn't handle all that emotional drama all at once, lol.
Gods. I don't know what else to say. I went through a journey, and I'm sad that it's over, but I'm happy that I experienced it. Cheesy, but true, lol.
And as you promised, this didn't have such a bittersweet ending. It's perfect.
Mikealfaxray chapter 33 . 9/25/2017
Hearing Leika talk about Antsas made me so happy. I felt like I had a bit of closure, lol. Gives me a bit of peace to know that Leika loved him til the end even if he had Halviore's heart.
Mikealfaxray chapter 17 . 9/22/2017
Oh my gosh I loved this chapter so much. It felt so.. fulfilling. It was beautiful and a perfect way to end part 1.
Mikealfaxray chapter 3 . 9/21/2017
I'm kinda confused by what he meant when he felt it when Vhan took off his coat, to be honest. Felt what? His scars? His power? Hmm.
Mikealfaxray chapter 1 . 9/21/2017
I read Leika a few months back and I put off reading this novel because I was still sad about the ending, and now I wish I hadn't done that. I've forgotten some details from the previous story, though they're coming back slowly. I'm just glad it isn't directly related. Otherwise I'd have to reread Leika and be sad all over again and put this one on the back burner. Lol. I'm excited though. I remembered how lovely I thought your writing is and I'm already hooked!
Guest chapter 44 . 8/19/2017
This is so beautiful. I love the mythology that you created and the amazing characters and how aching and longing and unfair and sweet their journeys were. Just wow.
owlzers chapter 25 . 4/12/2017

Poor Vhan baby.

From Sharle's pov of course I understand why he did it. He was just a boy after all when he was brought to the Shadow Realm and the Lords who trained and raised him (though I'm also extremely curious why a bunch of demon lords care so much about whether Vhan becomes King again or not. Did I miss something? )

BUT EVEN SO. :C Poor Vhan! I find it hard to imagine him ever crying in front of any of his pack mates, ever, so from their pov this must be quite scary and shocking, to see their strong leader so unhinged by what Sharle did.

I know the story was finished awhile ago, but I still had to leave my thoughts here at this juncture before I continue on.
Sychronergy chapter 10 . 3/14/2017
Waaaaaaah. I am in AWE of everything (: Your brilliant writing, your way with words, your characters - This is such a rare find on FP and I'm so, so glad I didn't wait too long before reading this. I didn't read Leika, but I went and skimmed through every chapter for any mentions of Halviore/Vhanaiel just to be on the safe side of not missing any huge plot points. (The last chapter gave me a few more speculations, but also assured me that Julan's obsession isn't a sort of one-dimensional plotting, which made me very, very happy)

But this story definitely has my full attention. I have to leave my computer now, but I can't wait to come back and read more tomorrow! Great job writing this! I think, so far, you nailed absolutely everything, from character to prose to dialogue (: I'm really, really happy that you shared this story with us and I feel blessed that I found your writing!
Sychronergy chapter 8 . 3/14/2017
Ooh, "Would you think away his future, to have his heart?" That line rings out to me as something a bit more than mere conversational dialogue. I feel like Aiber is up to no good. I'm LOVING Vhan and Julan moments - there's so much tension between them. I am really anticipating when more things are going to be revealed and I see a lot of foreshadowing here and there. This is definitely not some half-planned story and as far as everything goes, I'm really, really loving each word right now. Great job with the writing, with the characters, with everything. :)
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