I really enjoyed reading this.
I can’t wait until the next instalment.
Who are these sisters? What kind of life do they live?

I appreciate the creativity of the story. Would like to see it continued.

I really like it so far! Will you be continuing the story?

Hi, I thought your story was really good and interesting, especially the beginning. It would be nice if you could continue the story more, since the ending left me with a whole lot more questions and it wasn't particularly satisfying. I would like to see the sisters history more, and how she got to be so nonchalant with the idea of someone else having sex on her bed. Did she freak out the first time? Tell her sister to stop? Lock the door? Also, I would like to see what happens after the story and the repercussions of having kissing lessons with her sisters 'boytoy'. Thank you.

I am reviewing this story, and just that shows how good it is. I have studied what it takes to be a successful writer on the scene, and writers have seen improvements on their review counts after taking my advice, which is validation for my adeptness at judging good writing. I am an aspiring writer, and, actually, I practically could have written your profile as my own, it reminds me so much of myself right now. Writing is one of my greatest passions, seconded only by my love of helping other writers. And I've finally found another one worthy of my time.

On fictionpress, the summary is everything. In the real world, the opening-or the lead-is everything. Both of these are stunning in this work. I opened my browser today not expecting to find anything, saw your summary, read it twice, and decided that this story would probably be good. Then I clicked on it, and the lead just punched me in the face. It has a flair of wit that most writers don't know how to use. A moan, of course, could signify a male presence in the right context. But it was a girl moaning-the sister-which was a very clever way to say that. I enjoyed that very much. It was very good.

You are also very good at building the plot, which is not something I see a lot on fictionpress. The sister's visitor was able to identify the weakness in the main character's kissing scenes because the action was familiar to him. You kept alluding to his visible experience before it became important, which is the correct and masterful way to develop important factors such as this. No one understands this here. Very good.

I, however, found the storyline implausible, which is not necessarily criticism. I read and get most of my inspiration from manga, so I know a plot doesn't have to be realistic to be likable. Your prose could also use some refining, but, hey, we'll be 100 and our prose will still be able to be refined. The only thing I can tell you for this is to keep reading good books. "The Great Gatsby" by F. Scott Fitzgerald has exceptional prose if you want to see what I mean.

My only real critique is your ending. I found it weak. It didn't astound me like the lead did, as it should. Leave me with a feeling that I understand the world better, that I just got a glimpse at a rare jewel or glimmer of knowledge, something unique I have never seen before.

Other than that, you are an amazingly talented writer. I have a feeling you want to be recognizable and known like your main character for her stories, and I think you can get there. I really, really hope you'll let me follow you on this journey to you take to professionalism, pointing out rocks you could trip over and fending off ogres one the way. I love so much to help writers like you. You're already good, but I can help you be great. I know that you're new, but you deserve to be recognized for your writing more than almost anyone here.

Please, please, please post another story soon. You may hear this another time because I am going to review your first two stories now. I will be waiting. I'll tell you how you did.

Smile. Today's a good day.