|Reviews for Black Marion|
| C chapter 36 . 4/14/2021
I noticed that on your wattpad page, you made "Black Marion" Alex a woman, and changed the romance to m/f. I'm happy you've kept the m/m aspect here, though I don't know if that was your original intention for thus story? In any case, I do appreciate you keeping Alex male in this version, and the romance m/m themed :)
| C chapter 36 . 4/14/2021
Dear Cerana, I've read the original version of "Black Marion" before and I enjoyed that story very much. This rewrite is really amazing, and I think I like this version even more for many reasons: I love that we get to see how Alex and Haneul's relationship started, grew and flourished and that we saw that Vaughn is a very, very flawed man, but still a unique yet devastating character. I also enjoyed Alex's personality development and arch more in this version. I felt him more relatable and his story progression more natural. You Sea be amazing stories, so thank you so much for this journey!
| frostheaven8 chapter 36 . 6/2/2020
First I'd like to say you're an exceptionally good writer, truly. I normally dislike dystopian stories but I thoroughly enjoyed this one. Of course, there were things that did not make sense at all (like how it'd be impossible to have a building with 999 floors or why would the entire population of the world which is less than a billion is compressed in a single spot when the world is soo so vast or at least this was not explained well)
Also, I absolutely loved the fact that the main characters were truly unlikeable. I don't mean it sarcastically or in a bad way at all. They were likeable in a sense but very very unlikeable as well which got me sold. I'm tired of seeing stories with flawless main characters who can do no wrong and they are blessed by the gods with purest of souls. It is simply not realistic. In the entire story the doctor was the closest to this type of character which is why I did not like him but at the same time he was weak, he did not fight for Alex as he should have which kinda made me dislike him even more.
Probably my favorite character was Vaughn who I ended up hating and the last few chapters I was crying because I hated him and I hated you for making me hate me but I'll be damned if this isn't some insane story-writing! That's what the world fucking needs! This type of stories and characters where you hate everything that's happening because it's so brutal, so raw, so real.
Another reason why I absolutely loved your story was because it is one of the very very few stories out there that is MM but the MM thing is only secondary to the plot. When people scream they want representation that's what they truly mean! I want to read more stories like this with elaborate plots that have little to do with the love story BUT at the same time have a truly good love story in it (and some smut he-he)
Overall, was this my FAVORITE story ever? Probably not because like I said, dystopian is not my thing but hell if this story didn't make me FEEL.
Overall, you should DEFINITELY try to publish it. Please do that. The world needs gay stories like this and not just on some forgotten websites. Try to get a real publisher, get it polished over and make money off of it and make people ugly cry at 2am because Vaughn is a rapist ass but you still love him and want him to be happy. Make people truly FEEL with a story.
Keep up the good work, you're incredibly talented. Wish you all the bext!
| Anon chapter 35 . 4/16/2020
And even seeing how at first, Scio let the guilt and denial and anger consume him at time and increasingly so he continued with the way he was treating Alex, but then given the space of a month to face and accept what he’d done, could actually come to a space where he would finally let go of Alex, and even come back to his dream of a fairer world (even if this was greatly allowed by Alex telling Scio of his influence of inspiration on Alex). Honestly a great redemption that really worked well in the story.
Beautiful to see a fleshed out Marion, and also the development of the other characters as well. The flow was easy to follow, and overall the whole story more cohesive and therefore much more effective and gripping? Absolutely loved it. Thank you for coming back to this story and giving it a grand rewrite! (2/2)
| Anon chapter 36 . 4/16/2020
Wow, wow, wow! Absolutely love this version. It was amazing to see Vaughn able to carry out a dream in the end to forge a fair world for the Ground and the sky. And to see the worlds resolved to meet rather than stay separated. The power of love and doing the right thing, to bring back Scio to change a world, and Handel and Alex commitment to each other through years of uncertainty with no guarantee that their toil would pay off. For Vaughn to have a form of redemption, and Alex to know that they both have recovered as best as possible from their circumstances, Vaughn having the wisdom and ability to see their love and let them be, Haneul having the courage to face Alex honestly and trust Scio to lead a new world. Really good writing on fear and guilt pushing Scio to continue the way he was treating Alex, but then given the space of a month to stop, and really just realise and accept what he’d done,
I also loved to sciencey bits of Alex’s break through on the Marion tree, even more than in the first update. And the story of Marion Castel and Astrid, almost a story to show where the terrible System arose from a heartbreak, and ultimately fell to love, and not only the love of Alex and Haneul, but of Scio, the resistance and even the director and Alex’s father. (1/2)
| whoz.ella chapter 36 . 3/15/2020
I love it...As always an extraordinary work of art...
I can't wait to see more of you...
| Error101 chapter 36 . 3/13/2020
Awww and we finally get a happy ending! It’s been a while coming but I love it (the angst too even if I die everytime).
Thank you for sharing this with all of us again and taking the time to respond to the comments. After all these years I’m so glad you’re still writing and I hope you continue for any years more. I look forward to reading more of your creations in the future!
| Error101 chapter 34 . 3/8/2020
It was so fluffy in the beginning and I was like yaaas this is what I needed to close all the emotional trauma from the original.
And then as I continued reading I’m like NO I DIDN'T NEED THIS MY HEART CAN’T HANDLE THE ANGST.
Yes! The visual and the emotion from that original pre-reunion scene I think is one of the best there is, I remember feeling everything as it was described. But its true it wouldn’t have fitted with the rewrite. On the plus side it’s been replaced with the real fear I felt when Alex was trying to follow the papernote trail LOL so no complaints there xD. This story will always be amazing to me and I’m on this rollercoaster to the very end!
| Error101 chapter 1 . 2/28/2020
I read this story when you first wrote it and it has always stuck with me, I love it so much. I remember looking for it again later on and saw you were looking to change the genders of the main characters and felt really sad.
I remembered this story again today and thought I’d try my luck and see where it’s at now and I’m so glad I did. I’m so happy that you have kept the story here and that you are rewriting it! I love the additional horror and dystopian aspects. I think you’ve done the terror and suspense of the memory alteration perfectly, but there are parts from the original I really miss as well (like the part when Alex ventured to the Ground in search of his memories and sees Haneul again before he regained his memory). It’s weird rereading and getting new feelings about the story and charas haha. I feel more sorry for Vaughn this time round but fell less connected to Haneul...and Alex’s best friend LOL miss that guy, cause he was real mvp.
Regardless I’m so glad I looked for this story again and and so thankful you are writing it. I’ll definitely be following it for the conclusion!
| C chapter 1 . 1/19/2020
Hello there A. Cerana,
I really want to let you know that you are an incredible writer of fiction. I've already read through "Black Marion", and just saw that you have another story in the works from last year (2019) that I am super excited to start reading. The way you create your worlds and characters, and how you weave them all together, is absolutely lovely. I hope you'll be inspired to continue writing as you're talented, and I hope that you'll continue to write m/m fiction, too. You bring a realism to the content of your characters of this niche-genre that avoids some of the more stereotypical literary tropes I see in professionally published works (and on here), and for that I am forever grateful :D
| Anon chapter 16 . 11/25/2019
Indeed, that’s true! Oh and I’ll defo head over to whatpadd to see the next chapter.
Loved seeing Haneul showing a softer side by cooking breakfast with Alex and teaching him Hangul. And the end detail of Haneul drawing his hand away slight when Alex agreed to going home!
| Anon chapter 15 . 11/17/2019
Aw that was a touching chapter, with a nice ending on meeting Bennie... Time to get hacking! It’s cool to also see how Alex initially react to the reality of the Ground, and explore the start of his life on the Ground. (And the moments of jealousy and lowkey pining were fun . ) Btw I posted as Guest last chapter forgot to comment as Anon lol
| Guest chapter 14 . 11/11/2019
Even before I saw the newest update, I was thinking about how you described the Marion tree before, and the concept of the code resembling a tree holding all life (albeit in deadly clutches) that was also multidimensional and exceeding complex.
And also reading this chapter was beautiful, the exploration of the ground and seeing Haneul’s apartment in such personal detail is wonderful. I’m excited to see more of Alex’s time on the ground, and what may come of this relationship o
| Anon chapter 13 . 11/5/2019
Ooooh yes update update (I did pop over to whatpadd but still cool to see the update here too) and tbh seeing haneul and Alex’s relationship being explored now? I’m so excited (but when Vaughn inevitably returns, i’ll be ready :) (With long nails to bite down lol) the tension between him and Alex though,, but yeah glad you’re back!
| Anon chapter 12 . 9/26/2019
Ready to continue the rollercoaster to new heights, loved the update as well! I’m interested to see how it will work out, will Alex be able to make a getaway or will something else happen? Thanks for replying and updating