Reviews for Broken Carts
Guest chapter 17 . 7/28/2017
Okay was SO not expecting the end paragraph! You are too good at this! Poor Milo and Ezra - they really are self-destructive. And they were so close too! When you're writing, and the plot seems likely to go somewhere other than intended, do you keep writing, or do you stop and reset the poit you were on to go with the original plan?
TMi The Dork in the Corner chapter 17 . 7/28/2017
I was excited and was so ready for the next scene and then... the ending happened. I was so upset. lol I'm still a little confused where you're going with this story, but I'm addicted. I can't wait to read more.
Sms chapter 17 . 7/28/2017
My jaw figuratively dropped at the end. Urg. They have such good chemistry! Now I want to know more.
Fryvi chapter 17 . 7/28/2017
So hawt! I like that Ezra is a bottom :D too bad they won't be going through with it, but well, I guess it was too good to be true xD
Guest chapter 16 . 6/29/2017
Ugh I love this too much. I think I love the Ryan/Nadia scenes the most - its just the sheer comedy of the way Milo and Ezra respond to them. Especially Ryan, who seriously can't leave them alone. There's something special about Milo and Ezra's relationship too, and the way its evolving. I love the playlist idea of Milo's, I'm listening to the ones I don't recognise, I like that it'll give me an insight into the mood of the story. I have a question though I'm not sure it makes sense. How do you balance a character's quirks out so that they're relatable but interesting at the same time? What I mean, is that if a character is too off the wall in a habit or belief then they become cartoonish, or the reader focuses too much on the quirk and not the character themselves. But if you hit on the right angle then people tend to relate to the 'weird' aspects and the characters become real. I hope you can condense the question enough to follow it!
Fryvi chapter 16 . 6/29/2017
I really really liked this chapter. The mood or relationship or what to call it between the two of them is just awesome :D
Guest chapter 13 . 6/23/2017
Your updates are the sun to my sunflowers, the moon to my stars, the cheese to my toast.

Don't leave us hanging please!
rAiNwAtEr1 chapter 15 . 6/22/2017
Love this new installment! Keep the chapters coming.
Guest chapter 13 . 6/13/2017
Pleaseee update? Pretty pretty please?
Ella chapter 15 . 6/4/2017
Oh my goodness!

Not only do we get a new chapter but we also get ANSWERS! Thank you so much!

It's oddly comforting to know that absolutely brilliant writers like you are also plagued with doubts.. Though I'm absolutely sure that ever your first drafts must be something to look up to!

Your story continues to amuse, sadden, entertain and inspire me. It's kind of good that Milo is already far from college as he faces his identity crisis, his friends sound like assholes tbh and I think he will have to learn to let go of them. Hoping that Ezra stands by him though I wouldn't be surprised if he takes it the wrong way and interprets it as Milo being ashamed of him (a modestly employed, older man). It'll be interesting to see where ever it goes.

Bring on the chaos!
Guest chapter 15 . 5/24/2017
This really is a labour of love. It's so smooth and immersive that I forget there's a writer sitting editing and musing over plot points and character dyanamics. I aspire to write like this. Can you explain how you find the balance between dialogue and describing details? How do you know when to reveal a snippet of information about Ezra that gets us (and Milo) closer to figuring him out?
Fryvi chapter 15 . 5/24/2017
Ooh, nice one! I got a bit confused at the jump to present time in the photo scene, though it was kinda cute once I figured it out :) Seems like they're getting along well at least :D
Guest chapter 15 . 5/24/2017
Yuri on ice opening is the best thing ever. Haven't even watched the show but a a guy I play video games with had it blasting in the background. I get anxiety reading the drinking at work scenes how bad is that? Fantastic chapter as always.
Guest chapter 13 . 5/19/2017
Dying for an update.
Please please please.
Ella chapter 13 . 4/25/2017
Amazing chapter, as always!
I like the way you transition from one scene to another, from one idea to another. It's all so smooth and seamless and must require talent and effort on your part!

Ezra is a very interesting character to read about, though if I were a real-life friend of Milo's I'd have told Milo to either put his foot down or get some distance. I'm a sucker for jaded characters, and Ezra makes jaded sexy.. But Milo is so young and innocent, I kind of want to wrap him up in a blanket before he gets hurt. But honestly I'd be 100% on board wherver you went with this story, you're an excellent storyteller and you do angst well. You have us all wrapped around your pinky!

Now, on to the questions! I was thrilled to read your latest AN as I have so many QUESTIONSSSS AND I'M BURNINGGG but I'll do my best to be respectful of your time-here's a selection of my inquiries:

- Do you ever hate what you've written? Like reaching chapter 8 and finding yourself repulsed by the first chapters already-has that ever happened to you? How did you deal with it if it did?

- Is English your first language? (and if you don't mind, where are you from? Just curious bc I found some strange expressions in your story and I couldn't place their sources)

- Is Ezra based on someone you knew in your real-life? Do you relate more to Ezra or to Milo in this story?

(English is not my 1st language, not even my 2nd actually, so hope I still make sense in this review! Sorry to bore you!)
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