Very interesting. I think it's pretty good. I do think that you used 'innit' wrong, though. Innit, as far as I can tell, is short for ain't it, but you use it in place of in it. Is that a typo?
And also, I think that the last sentence could use a bit of spicing up to make it more shocking. Make it stand out. Make it dramatic. If you can manage that, you have a great cliffhanger.
But overall, you have an interesting style of writing. I hope to see the next chapter soon!