Reviews for Potentia
CrimsonBlade21 chapter 6 . 11/24/2016
Great story so far! Haven't seen a good superhero story in a while. Hope you have success:). I like the characters so far too. The only problem I see is that Laura's sword reminds me of Thor's hammer. Unless you can give her something original with the sword, I'm afraid that comparison won't change. Update soon!
TheOneAndOnlyWriter chapter 6 . 11/24/2016
Diesel and Blackwell are in a draw for the characters I hate msot at the moment.
At least Diesel doesn't pretend he's anything BUT cruel.

LAURA
BE CAREFUL
YOU'RE SO CLOSE TO BLACKWELL AND IDK IF YOU KNOW HE'S THERE.

ALSO
BLACKWELL
YOU SET FIRE TO A KID'S HOME?!
I HATE U
EVEN MORE THAN I DID YESTERDAY.
I HATE YOU A CONSIDERABLE AMOUNT.

ARRGH

This is so teeeeeeeeeeeennnnnnnnse
I'm eager to see Laura and Lily in action but I don't want anyone to get hurt...
Well, expect for Diesel and Blackwell
meheheheh...

BUT STILL
I AM AFRAID.

Update soon please! I need moar of this!
TheOneAndOnlyWriter chapter 5 . 11/19/2016
Gran is one of my favourite characters now.
1. She's really sassy.
2. She KNOWS why Laura is avoiding Blackwell and she's not afraid to say it to her face. AND she reminds Laura that it's important to fight the people that are wrong.

ur awesome, granny.

Lily.. .well she's only been there for a chapter so there's not much to say. But I'm interested to see how she is at fighting, and I think her power is pretty awesome. As someone who can't even successfully braid my hair, I salute (and envy) you, Lily.

I bet Agent Wells is immortal.

I REFUSE TO BELIEVE THAT POINTED COUGH WAS FOR NOTHING.

I can so imagine the final conflict between everyone, with Laura striking Blackwell with lightning and Blackwell trying to get Laura with fire and they're both wounded and then Agent Wells turns up like WHAT UP, BITCHES?

(Excuse my french)
Loved this chapter, as always. The tension is slowly building. Liek in chapter one it was like:

...
And then
...
And then
...
And then
...
And I bet the last chapter is gonna be like
...KABOOM SMASH BANG EPIC BATTLE.

Update sooooooooooon pls (btw, how DO YOU UPDATE SO FAST? It's so great) I need MOAR
TheOneAndOnlyWriter chapter 4 . 11/16/2016
Blackwell.
BLACKWELL.
GRRRRRRRRRRR
I DON'T LIKE HIM
HE'S SUCH AN IDIOT

LAURA
THANK GOD YOU'RE SO BRAVE
THO I'M KINDA WORRIED YOUR MUM MIGHT GET HURT OR SOMETHING.
BUT STILL
WELL DONE FOR STANDING UP TO HIM.

I agree with you, Casey is awesome (Though I like Laura a tad more.) I love how stubborn she is! It's like Blackwell doesn't know how to deal with rejection and now this little package of pure rejection (Casey) has appeared on his doorstep and he's like WTF WHAT DO I DO WITH IT.

I'm worried that Casey and Laura will get into a fight because I like them both and I want them to unite against Blackwell but KNOWING STORIES THAT ISN'T GOING TO HAPPEN

AHHHHHHHH
WHY DO YOU DO THIS TO MY FEELS?

Love the chapter so much, can't wait for the next one!
TheOneAndOnlyWriter chapter 3 . 11/13/2016
DUN DUN DUN
DUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUN
DUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUNNNNNNNNNNNN
DUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUNNNNNNNNNNNN

Wow this chapter was deep. Rlly emotional and tense!
SO
I no longer need to refer to Blackwell as violin dude anymore.
AND HE WAS ROMANTICALLY INVOLVED WITH LAURA'S MUM
PLOT TWIST MUCH
i wonder if the pregnant woman he threatened was her...
Hmm...

AND LAURA
I AGREE WITH YOU - CRIME FIGHTING IS AWESOME
BUT TRY NOT TO GET INTO TOO MUCH TROUBLE.

I'VE ONLY KNOWN YOU FOR THREE CHAPTERS (and you've been in two of them) BUT STAY SAFE

PLS

Loved this chapter, you set up the conflict so well, which is BRILLIANT for writing but kinda bad for my feels XD
I know I'm going to end up stress eating in front of my computer at SOME POINT in this story.
ah well
ITS A PRICE IM WILLING TO PAY.
UPDATE SOON PLEASE!
TTFN!
TheOneAndOnlyWriter chapter 2 . 11/12/2016
YAAAAAAAAAAAAAAYYYYYYY YOU UPDATED SO FAST
HOW
HOOOOOOWWW

Wow, the part where she goes to see her dad's grave (well, I'm 99% sure it's her dad's grave) is so deep and sweet. I love that.

TYSM for dedicating this chapter to me! I love your writing so much :)

And violin dude...
hmm..
HHHHHHHHHHMMMMMMMMMMMMM.
I DON'T TRUST HIM.
NUH-UH
NOPE
NADA
I DON'T TRUST THE VIOLIN DUDE (that's what I'm going to call him from now on)

AND CASEY'S ESCAPED
DUN DUNDUN

I'm guessing she has a grudge against Laura too.
That makes the story even better because we're seeing it from both perspectives and knowing how much I get affected by books when the conflict comes I'm just gonna be hugging my pillow like THE FEEEEEEEEEEEEELLLLLLS

GREAT chapter!
LOVED it!
UPDATE soon!

:D
TheOneAndOnlyWriter chapter 1 . 11/12/2016
Wow, amazing writing (as always) and I must agree, I think this version is better than the old one. Not that the old one was bad!
Your prologue is brilliantly done - it doesn't feel like an infodump of exposition (which is what mine usually do!) It feels more like a first chapter.
A really, really good first chapter!
I hate Walton.
I rlly don't like him.
I mean who DA F threatens a pregnant woman?! WTF dude?
And why would you want to stop the lightning-catching?! ULTIMATE father daughter bonding time!
So yeah.
Walton's a git.
Hey Walton.
You're a git.
LOL what'chu gonna do about it?
Well, I'm going to hope that badass-fully-grown-fully-lightningified-Laura kicks your arse one day.

I'll be waiting :)

So anyways, this is brilliant, please update soon! I've been reading your writing since I first stumbled over it when I didn't have the foggiest idea how to use this site, and your stories always blow me away. And they just keep getting better!

ta ta for now
:)