Reviews for Saving the World Means Marrying a Alien? (Short-Story, Complete!) |
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annabanana1994 chapter 8 . 9/30/2019 The story has potential but as of right now it's not good... I like the idea that was presented but it wasn't carried out well. The characters have no depth, they're as flat as can be and this being a short story is no excuse... Short stories don't have to be rushed, they just have to be short and for them to be short sometimes you have to make it about an event and not about a full story but shortened. this isn't even Stockholm Syndrome because even Stockholm Syndrome victims take longer to present characteristics of this syndrome... It's been three years since you wrote this so I'm sure it would improve if you decided to revise it. Example of how this can be improved; choose an event, in the case of this story, it could be from the moment she is about to travel to the alien planet to the mating. When writing it you have to flesh out how she is going to feel and explain it very in-depth. Context can be added in the form of flashbacks or thoughts of the past. Honestly, if you follow this path you are going to have an angsty story but at least it will be better... if what you want is a romance then you cannot do it in this way because it is not good... I'm in chapter eight and I feel no sympathy for any of the males... The females, and especially the main character seem just dumb... Also, I would like to add that there is no point in adding what your beliefs are as it just makes your character look even more dim-witted (aka themes of waiting until marriage, abortion, etc.)... |
jadesays chapter 15 . 7/15/2018 I love this story. And I love how you make the readers remember what words are used in Almikane like we are part of the new residents. I really wish I could read story of Yumi and Haze from the beginning just like this story. How they met for the first time, the awkward moment when he found out that she was on her period, up until they fell for each other hard. I can imagine them as a cute shy couple. :) |
Skye Blue Meadows chapter 15 . 1/26/2018 I like the storyline. I wish there was more to the story or that you had added more stories it is quite unique and interesting. I read the story before and just got done rereading it. Thank you for sharing this story with us. |
Guest chapter 15 . 6/21/2017 I love this so much! |
MostlyAlexLeigh chapter 15 . 6/20/2017 This was such a cute story! I'm actually glad it was short, I think any other way it would have felt drawn out, or you would have had to include drama that would take away from the simplicity that makes this story so good. You mentioned that people have asked for a sequel, but I don't think that would work. I think the tale has been told. However, you could do a 'sequel' of the same situation but with different characters. Maybe a woman more bull headed, a man less perfect? Maybe they find that she can't have kids, or his pheromones don't work on her? It would be cool, in part, because we would see "Emma-Cam" from the perspective of the many, many scared women. I loved this story! Thank you for writing! |
MostlyAlexLeigh chapter 7 . 6/20/2017 So I was running late this morning and didn't get breakfast... The meal she is making sounds *so good*. Wonderful chapter! I can't imagine being pregnant for that long, my god! |
MostlyAlexLeigh chapter 4 . 6/20/2017 Ohh, I wonder what ami-te means... Something romantic, I'm sure. OMG poor Emma! She's gonna be so shocked! |
MostlyAlexLeigh chapter 3 . 6/20/2017 I love that she got distracted. I've read a couple of stories like this (and tbh I am worried as to why, because they're all dangerously similar to Stockholm syndrome) and too much they forget that humans aren't used to aliens. There will be a moment of shock before the fear kicks in, probably. Loving this. :) |
MostlyAlexLeigh chapter 2 . 6/20/2017 So far, I am loving this! I also love that they had to get all of these women to the White House from all over and they were like- what is the most efficient car-like transport? Bus? Nah. Minivan? Nah. Limo. That's it, right there, best option. Can't wait to see how it goes! |
Hypa To Hell And Back chapter 15 . 1/22/2017 eeeeek! that was amazing! sooooo ogoood |
Hypa To Hell And Back chapter 14 . 1/22/2017 this story should go on forever! simple. end of. |
Hypa To Hell And Back chapter 13 . 1/22/2017 hahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahah that is so funny. sorry but she really is funny |
Hypa To Hell And Back chapter 12 . 1/22/2017 she is a massive baka! she loves him but she doesn't know its like Harley and kevin all over again. eeek I love these guys |
Hypa To Hell And Back chapter 11 . 1/22/2017 mmmmneeeaaackkk! yes I just made a very weird and funny noise. I love this chapter. its so playful but so much tension its mad. |
Hypa To Hell And Back chapter 10 . 1/22/2017 I love the stripping stuff that was really funny. there was something else I wanted ot say but now I cant remember what it was or what it was about... oh wait I do remember. the bit about putting your feelings and other stuff aside we really don't care who we have sex with. I know that feeling well I wont go into it here though. aha I quite liked this chapter |