I probably said this before but this is just so cuuuute

naw I love Yumi she sounds adorable!

I realised that I still had this open and that I haven't read anything much this week and then I realised that I hadn't actually finished. dummy right but hey, I finished it in the end. I like the renovations they are cool. its a cute chapter.

haha Kieran is just the cutest. so straight faced but I can see into his mind mwhahaha he has a dirty mind. thats what I think any way

This is an interesting story. Some of the later chapters were difficult, but HEY, that's life on an alien planet. There were a few minor errors that were ez for me to read thru without slowing down. I make enough errors myself. Fortunately, I have a beta who corrects most of them. One thing that bugged me was the word cloths. There should be an E in there when writing about a person's clothing - clothes. Sorry bout that, but I recently joined a writer's group and we nit-pick the hell out of each other. Feel free to criticize any of my stories. I like critical reviews almost as much as praise.

okay, seriously, once is not enough, did he go like millions of years with not getting any? that's all I can think about right now is just that point. seriously man. you were demanding enough last night, you can do it again she wont mind, she didn't last night, she was up for it its fine :P pahhahaha oh my god. I cant believe I'm am thinking that. :/ I'm worried now about my sanity.

But on a serious side, the history lesson, amazballs. that was quite good. whats a Lunith? is it? that's caught my eye I want to know

OH MY GOD! LIKE SERIOUSLY WHAT THE ****! MY MIND IS IN OVER DRIVE! IM LITERALLY SO EXCITED I DONT THINK I AM SPELLING ANYTHING RIGHT. I AND EVEN STRUGGLING TO TYPE FOR PETES SAKE! WHAT THE HELL! DEMANDING MUCH?! HOW LONG WAS IT SINCE HE GOT HIM SELF ANY?! OH MY GOD! THAT WAS AMAMZING!

haha sorry got a little carried away there. that was soooooooo good. now I certainly understand why this is one of your best I mean that scene. damn! that was HOOOOOOOOT! like majorly hot. and so satisfying

ooo smexy ending there. I'm making goraing noises in my head from satisfaction. haha I like it. I don't really have anything to pick on really exceot all the transportation things... if they transport you don't you think it could hve done it in one slot not... nearly 2 hours worth of walking?

Okay this is the first thing that totally doesn't make sense. On this chapter where Hana receives the message from the White House it reads that is Wednesday July the 8th but noot 2 sentences later it's suddenly Tuesday July 8th uhm...what? And also at first I was really confused because she went to sleep at 1.22am and then woke at 1am and that took me a second to realise what on earth you were doing with yourself haha then it clicked. It's the next day. I'd like to know why this family are up at stupid times as that unless everything changes by 2020.

It would have been nice to have a nicer connection to her parents as it's meant to be such a big thing that she is Levi g them but like you said short stories have to have certain things cut out for yen rice or I suppose. I'm really sorry if this makes no sense no am typing really fast on my iPhone and so things might not work out properly.

Other hen that is surprised you chose a limo for the transportation. A high class coac. Would seem better. Aren't you meant to be sending off loads of your nations kids? Letting them sit cramped and on the floor just doesn't seem to fit really.

I'm excited for when Hana meets Keiran is it? I might have that completely wrong sorry haha I'll stop now I'm honing to continue reading

I'm in love with him already! Haha I was a little like what the hell are you doing not telling me what he looks like as an alien but then I got the end and here we are finding out what he looks like.

It's a good start. Action packed but action packed. It's interesting and has me hooked already

Interesting story! Your creative imagination is much better than mine. In my alien story, 'Passing for Human,' the alien came to earth, so I didn't have to create an alien setting as you have. I'm enjoying your story.

Great story!

Lovely story. Wished there was more of it

The other 2 reviews are right, good but rushed. You should expand these already existing sections, add a few scenes, or add more chapters on! Good job and nice plot, but seems to rushed and short.

such a sweet ending! loved the story!