|Reviews for The Patince of a Spider|
| L.E. Lamkin chapter 1 . 2/16/2017
That was a pretty neat twist there at the end. I think you could work on maybe adding a bit more description to your prose, to set the scene a little bit more and paint a picture of the characters and their surroundings more clearly and vividly. Also, some of the dialogue here and there was a bit unrealistic or wooden/stilted. I try reading my dialogue out loud to myself to make sure it sounds realistic and natural after I've written it. I wish you would have given us more on the spider creatures too, but that's mostly because I found them interesting more so than your typical giant bug creature. As in, were they aliens, etc? Good effort!