Reviews for Sleepless
LorrahBear chapter 1 . 6/24/2017
Really well done! Great start!

Only one small typo noticed: "only things was". An easy fix. :)

I am enjoying your story so far, and can't wait to see more. You do a great job creating a world I can really visualize.
PlurusPorynmZealousSwordsMan chapter 18 . 6/7/2017
Was this one meant to make me sad? cause this made me sad...damn nice job!
Lucy00Q chapter 14 . 3/13/2017
The prince seems to be a talkive type, haha. Also, I think when he first woke up he asked too many questions in a line, usually it should be one question, getting no answer, and then another question, I think?
Lucy00Q chapter 11 . 2/27/2017
Good work!
Can't wait to start the new chapters!
Lucy00Q chapter 10 . 2/27/2017
Poor Jordan...
PlurusPorynmZealousSwordsMan chapter 11 . 2/17/2017
;n; joran...
Guest chapter 11 . 2/16/2017
Some criticism: Rose's character has a bit too quick of a turnaround. Maybe you should make her slowly grow more empathetic over time, but Malerie refuses to see her as anything other than the spoiled brat, or maybe Rose fluctuates between a brat and an actual kind person? I don't know. Other than that this is SO SO SO GOOD WOWA WOW
Guest chapter 11 . 2/16/2017
OHMIGOODNESS
MarggiS chapter 11 . 2/16/2017
Please update soon!
Guest chapter 10 . 2/11/2017
NO Joran is so good and pure he can't die oh no
PlurusPorynmZealousSwordsMan chapter 10 . 2/11/2017
well then...that just happened...
Lucy00Q chapter 6 . 2/10/2017
Context-dependent memory. Sorry, it is misspelled in the last review.
Lucy00Q chapter 5 . 2/10/2017
You know all about the scientific theories of how habits are grown, one is called content-dependent memory. There's a TED speech by Judson Brewer about this.
Rose is spoiled. This is true. She has gone through many times of reinforcement of what could make her feel better.
As an old woman, Malerie should have expected the difficulty in being between the king, the queen and the princess, building up her mental walls much earlier, before it hurt her too deep.
Rose's habit of sleeping too much could be an unpredictable factor in the evolvement of this. But I think you should make the sleep part more uncontrollable, more of an unpredictable, supernatural factor. Tragedy comes from the sleep curse, not from a little girl. So there won't be too much weight straining on Rose when you try to make the whole plot more logic.
Lucy00Q chapter 4 . 2/10/2017
So much hard work, and it resulted in another really engaging chapter.
However, here are what I feel that could be done better:
The small talks of the guards are like high-schoolers..I think they are supposed to be 25 or older?
Lucy00Q chapter 3 . 2/10/2017
I presume Rose and the mysterious boy will be the only love birds in this novel...Joran and Malerie seem like second male leader and female leader living together for their whole life.
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