Reviews for Inner Thoughts
Zukafu Chiriamoto chapter 1 . 1/30/2017
A good start but, honestly, I wanted more!
You seemed to only just scratch the surface of those emotions, those feelings when it ended. It's like having a single bite out of a chocolate bar; it's beautifully satisfying but you want a liiiiiiiiiiiittle bit more.

Though this may be a personal choice, and if it is I can respect that, but I felt maybe some punctuation wouldn't go a miss. It feel it could bring emphasis and tone to your piece without changing any of your lovely words. E.g: "I fail; you snicker behind my back."

I think it's good though. Hopefully, this is but the start of many poetry pieces. Best of luck,
Zukafu