My goodness, I was not expecting that. And... Now I'm grabbing for a tissue.

Very poignant for such a short piece - not that it felt short at all. I'm quite surprised at how effectively your conveyed so much emotion and a good deal of irony all in under 500 words. Incredible.

An amazing piece! May the writing force keep strong,
Zukafu

Son of a gun!

I'm crying now... seriously, and I really want to punch that man in the face, and the stomach, and other areas.

I really admire the girl for being so strong in the face of the man being an ass (Pardon the French... although I feel like saying much worse!) But I'm angry and sad now... :(
Bittersweet replacement like hell... women and children can't be replaced! D:

I'm going to go cry now...

Short, but deeply lovely. :)

A few small typos: he hits his lip at one point. I assume this should be bit.

When following speech with action, you should use a period (or question/exclamation mark if valid) instead of a comma. For example: "No, you should go." She turned away...

This was lovely. Fantastic job! I love the ending with the thunder (although I'm not sure I'd of taken it as kindly as she did!).