|Reviews for Bittersweet Replacement|
| Zukafu Chiriamoto chapter 1 . 2/1/2017
My goodness, I was not expecting that. And... Now I'm grabbing for a tissue.
Very poignant for such a short piece - not that it felt short at all. I'm quite surprised at how effectively your conveyed so much emotion and a good deal of irony all in under 500 words. Incredible.
An amazing piece! May the writing force keep strong,
| BradytheJust chapter 1 . 1/31/2017
Son of a gun!
I'm crying now... seriously, and I really want to punch that man in the face, and the stomach, and other areas.
I really admire the girl for being so strong in the face of the man being an ass (Pardon the French... although I feel like saying much worse!) But I'm angry and sad now... :(
Bittersweet replacement like hell... women and children can't be replaced! D:
I'm going to go cry now...
| LorrahBear chapter 1 . 1/31/2017
Short, but deeply lovely. :)
A few small typos: he hits his lip at one point. I assume this should be bit.
When following speech with action, you should use a period (or question/exclamation mark if valid) instead of a comma. For example: "No, you should go." She turned away...
This was lovely. Fantastic job! I love the ending with the thunder (although I'm not sure I'd of taken it as kindly as she did!).