This is a great piece! The language flows very nicely. I love the line "we abhor love because we fear pain". Overall, this story is intriguing and the points you make are very convincing! Great job.

The overall concept is really nice. I like it. But I have second thoughts towards this.. /and they will see what you have to offer/
How it could be possible to love someone based on what they would offer. It will become business I guess..
Other than that I enjoyed reading it. Appreciate it.