Reviews for The Orange Witch and the Goldfish
RainbowPearls chapter 1 . 4/13/2020
Wow, what a tale! XD
I'm so glad over the fact that Spielberg died through the balls! She was such a witch and she fooled the poor Lady! But the witch was herself fooled because she didn't exactly eat the goldfish she wanted xD

Fix and Wolf are truly naughty! But they actually helped their mom in one way!

"Fox groaned and clutched his head. "Oh man, oh man! Why could you not have popped out at show-and-tell is what I want to know? Couldn't you have waited a bit longer? We would have brought down the house if you had come out of a fish in front of the whole class!" This part was entirely hilarious! XD
BradytheJust chapter 1 . 9/17/2017
Well, death by bowling ball... I've seen weirder.

The Orange Witch was a very good villain. Smart, resourceful, and very evil... and her plan was very well thought out. I like that in a bad guy.

However, the ending left me unsatisfied. I would have liked to have seen a reunion between the man and Mrs. Gniverg.

Still, a small complaint to an otherwise great story! Keep it up! :)
Please Not The Face chapter 1 . 3/27/2017
I'm not sure who the target audience for this is. While the story seems to be written in a fairy-tale manner, the way it is presented seems too straight forward and monotonous. The dialogue between all the characters feel too cartoony, and not the Dora the Explora kind of cartoony, the cereal commercial kind. Heck, the boys managed to somehow effortlessly set up three bowling balls above a door silently (It's a flat. They tend to be small and sound tends to travel easily). Overall, it seems as if it written for elementary school aged children, but the themes, certain word choices, and the content of the dialogue seem to be something more fitting for middle school aged children.

The more minor complaints:
It feels really odd to read the words "old boyfriend" so many times in short succession. You should either name him or pick a noun other than 'boyfriend'. Besides, if they're engaged, why is he called "old boyfriend"? It's not as if she dumped him or planned to dump him. Why are the kids named Fox and Wolf? On top of bringing up odd imagery, neither or them seem to embody traits of their animal namesake.