Reviews for Bloody Mary
AlternatingCurrent chapter 1 . 4/19/2017
Good opening. Describing her damaged armor shows us that she has just come from battle and grabs the interest of the reader right away. Also gripping is the image of a female knight. Good dialogue that fits the style of writing and the atmosphere of the story.

Be careful of tense consistency. For the most part it is good, but near the end you slip from past tense into present tense and then back again.

Even though I suspected that Mary was responsible for the mysterious deaths, there was enough mystery to keep me reading until the end. There is certainly enough set-up here for a continuation of this story if you chose to do so.