|Reviews for The Good, The Bad, and The Dead|
| http.thatrandomgirl chapter 1 . 4/21/2017
Ooo this is so interesting! Can't wait to read more :)
| AlternatingCurrent chapter 1 . 4/21/2017
I wonder if the ending would have a bigger impact if your main character didn't start by talking about her life ending. It preempts the surprise ending of her finding herself dead, if a surprise is what you were going for.
[I was sure that I would be loved, not running away from my life and away from everything that had led up to this moment.] I think you could expand on this. Let us know what she is running from. Why is she running now? This would add more dimension to your character and add to the tragedy of her death.
You do a good job of applying strong verbs that add to the imagery of the story: [I skittered down the steep incline], [the latch popped], [had the car plummeted], etc. Having her question if she hit a hiker was a good touch; it made me consider that she maybe wasn't dead and she had in fact hit someone else.
Thanks for sharing.
| IhaveNoAmbition969 chapter 1 . 4/21/2017
If she didn't hear her scream then maybe she didn't.