Reviews for Innocence |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Loser mother. Sweet goodbye between Levi and Louise. |
![]() ![]() This is going good, my only suggestion would be not to repeat chapter content (6 and 7 were the same, just different POVs). As a reader I ended up skimming 7 a bit because I'd already read the scene in the previous chapter and just wanted to get on to what happens next in the story instead of seeing a rehash of the scene. There are ways to show what both characters felt about things such as in a new chapter having one briefly reflect here and there and what happened in a previous one. But I like your characterizations and writing style. |
![]() ![]() Loving where this is going. Keep up the good work. |
![]() ![]() ![]() loving the story so far, please update soon :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() More more more please! I like this story a lot. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Like this story so far! |