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Bread, your writing is full-on, straight up mellifluous. Your prose reads like poetry. I am not here to flatter you, just to be honest. As proof of my objectivity, you spelled "navel" as "naval". So, there.

Nissan gave me those nice Luna Lovegood vibes. I do love a spacey girl who knows far more than her demeanor would betray.

Your story's flow was great. The idea of vampire venom is new to me, and I like it. RIP Deegan. I love how you introduced the mayor-it lit up his character extremely well, even in the small role that he had. A diction.

I'm not a great review writer, but this was dope. I seriously want to spread it on toast.

Ooh, this is a darkly enchanting tale, Augs. The opening lines just set a somber, ominous mood that carries through the whole piece. Autarkhos as a battle hardened warrior princess vampire slayer is a really interesting story concept, and I love how you've gone against the over the top potential of that description by instead presenting a grounded, grimmer interpretation replete with the proper weight and gravitas that comes with that position. I would like to read more stories of this princess.

If I have to offer criticism, the story as a whole is a bit dry, there's not a lot that happens here - that being said, I love the way you've described everything that does happen. In addition, I like Nissa but I don't really understand what happened in the finale there or what her motivations really were, though I'll admit that adds a flair of mystery.

Overall, another great story.

Okay, so it's been close to three years since I've read any of your works, or even been on fictionpress, but all I can say is that I am so happy that I have come back to read your wonderful writing. It's a great short story and don't worry, it's mature not wanky, at least in my opinion. I hope you have a lovely week.

I'm actually still in the middle of reading this story so far (really enjoying it btw), but I'd found a couple of things that I wanted to note that I think I might help, if you haven't already found them:

In paragraph 12, "When Autarkhos blinked opened her eyes", I recommend changing it to either:
- "Autarkhos opened her eyes" or
- "Autarkhos blinked open her eyes"
Blinked opened just sounds awkward since the verb tenses for the two words don't go together.

I like the line "it settled like an angry flock of starlings on winter branches."

In paragraph 16, sentence 5, I recommend respelling "titled" to "title".

In paragraph 18, sentence 3, you mention her thinking that at least her hands aren't shackled behind her, but you mentioned that recently in paragraph 12, so having it again here might be redundant. Not a big issue, but if you want something to cut later on this line might be a good one to consider.

In paragraph 36, I recommend changing the fourth sentence from "there was so way" to "there was no way". I'm guessing this was a typo.

I'm confused by what prinkipissa means, though I assume it's a similar title to princess or something.

Before paragraph 54, where you talk about Autarkhos coming back a month later, it might be good to put a symbolic break between 53 and 54, to better highlight the break in time for the text. For example, a line with just "***" between the two paragraphs. This is mostly a stylistic recommendation, since you do indicate the passage of time in the text. This might make it stand out more to the reader if you want to emphasize it for clarity.

I hope these help. If there's anything I said that sounded off or offensive please let me know. Really cool story so far.