Reviews for Stop and Think
LittleDeadFly chapter 1 . 9/1/2017
[Never before have i ever felt so nervous.]

Make sure to capitalize your 'I's and not some of the time.

[Oh it's time to get to school, can't be late on the first day. As i walk out the front door my mom says good bye and that she loves me. I in turn replied with the same. I walked down the street to my bus stop.]

This feels like a wasted opportunity to show the reader she's actually nervous about going to school. She says she feels that way, but we never get to see it for ourselves. Does she eat anything? What is her expression when she says goodbye? Does she take her time going to the bus stop?

[Allison has always been kind of a tomboy. It fits her play style.]

Well, okay, but why is she wearing a pink dress if she's a tomboy?

["It's all good Allison, just a little nervous is all" i said as i tripped and fell on an uneven bit of sidewalk.]

Punctuation should always be inside the quotes.

The way this is written, it seems as though Hanna was talking while she was falling.