|Reviews for The Other Side|
| Timbo Slice chapter 1 . 9/16/2017
What an intense start to this story! The visions and descriptions of blood were conveyed in a beautifully terrifying way, I think it has to do more with when we have bad dreams we tend to think of them more as "real" do to the sense of mortal danger, and I think you did a pretty good job of getting her terror across. The backstory helps to get more of a feel for her mental state but I'm curious as to the actual prognosis of her condition or if it is really more along the lines of supernatural haunting? Perhaps some more insight as to her condition like clinical terms and other symptoms can really flesh out her mental state. The conflict with her boyfriend seems like needlessly superfluous filler in my opinion, and if her really cared about her why would he stress her out knowing the state of mind she is in? Again the last vision of hers offers terrifying imagery with the rotting skeletons and presence of the little girl and you spare no sympathy at her plight at all which really punctuates the scene. I mean she vomited AND peed herself!? Oh man that is such cringe for her! lol
Awesome start to the story!
| Marina x Machina chapter 1 . 9/13/2017
Alice seems like a good friend.
This is well structured, flows nicely, and provides just enough detail so as to maintain attention and remain easy to read. Good work. I will look forward to learning more about the strange girl.